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Quote by: iahag  What do you think? Please, be painfully honest, I desire nothing more than to know what people truely think. This is in continuation of my 'emotional education'. Having loved and lost, I feel a profound need to create things in order to remain peaceful and productive. I also feel that science without appreciation of art is nothing more than mere labour, which is why I'am doing my best to stay in touch with the other side of my brain. |
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I learned something from blues songs which are written much like a poem.
They often sing the blues about their stuggles in life but most blues songs toss in a a line that shows a ray of hope. Without a ray of hope it might as well be a depressive suicide note. Finding that ray of hope for a poem might take a little time, but it will come.
" but someday the sun is gonna shine in my backdoor again".